Describing for Writing

 Aloha Readers,

This term our writing has been discription writing. In a discription we learned that it needed to show not tell, its not a story, it needs to describe a moment in time, describe hear, see, smell, feel taste, paint a picture in the readers head, write in present tense and using descriptive language. To be honest I find it hard to descriptive writing. Its not my favourite type.

Anyway here is my writing from this week

The people

The smiles on the kids faces made the party thrilling. Party popers blew off and made them giggle.

Excitement is right in the air. Birthday girls face flushed bright pink. She beamed as brightly as the lit

candles on top of the chocolate, gooey, beautiful cake. They stared at each other and the food.

By the way this is the photo I was trying to describe

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Canterbury Swim School

Hola Everyone,

Are you doing anything for the long weekend?

For the last two weeks the whole school including my class has been going to canterbury swim school. Our class left at 11:15 and came back around before lunch time. My coach at the swim school was a guy called Martin. He was pretty nice and a good swim teacher. Anyway today swimming has ended and we might start swimming at our school.

Here is a photo of the whole class

Do you like swimming?

Did you learn how to swim when you were younger?

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Cloze

 Hello everybody,

How was the Holidays?

I really missed blogging to you all. By the way my holiday was great. This week our teacher(Miss Scott) gave us a new cloze. It is called Kia Maia. A short summary of the story would be about a boy who was hit by a ball in the face and then went to his nan and prepared for his unveiling. Have you heard of this story before? Do you know what an unveiling is? 

Here is my cloze

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