Aloha Readers,
This term our writing has been discription writing. In a discription we learned that it needed to show not tell, its not a story, it needs to describe a moment in time, describe hear, see, smell, feel taste, paint a picture in the readers head, write in present tense and using descriptive language. To be honest I find it hard to descriptive writing. Its not my favourite type.
Anyway here is my writing from this week
The people
The smiles on the kids faces made the party thrilling. Party popers blew off and made them giggle.
Excitement is right in the air. Birthday girls face flushed bright pink. She beamed as brightly as the lit
candles on top of the chocolate, gooey, beautiful cake. They stared at each other and the food.
By the way this is the photo I was trying to describe
Great idea to include the photo with your writing Talisa.
ReplyDeleteI think you did a good job with your writing to put a picture in the readers head.
Did you get to pick the picture or did the teacher share it with everyone?.