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On 20th of November Fire Jess came and teached our class for the day. She taught us a little different from Miss Scott. While we were with her for writing we wrote an description about Lisa Simpson trying to show not tell. Do you know who Lisa Simpson is? Do you know the phrase Show not tell? Would you like to see what I wrote?
If yes, here is a paragraph I wrote about her face
1st Paragraph - describe her face/head
Lisa had circle shaped eyes the colour of a black screen surrounded by the white choclatey ocean. Her hair was like a spiky hedgehog and her eyelashes were the colour of dark chocolate the size of little sticks. Tiny ears popped out of the sides of her big star shaped head. She had a big nice grin on her face.
Do you think it is good?
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