Talofa Everyone,
This week we made a narrative for writing in class. My story is bassiaclly about a princess called Ashitaya who runs away from the world and hides in her castle on top of the hill. Then one day this guy called Brick comes and keeps annoying her asking her to marry him. So she decided to hire a person to kill him for her. But she kills the killer in the end to leave no witnesses and Brick the guy who died by the hitman marrys an angel instead. Then Brick meets the killer and thanks him.
Here is my story but i'm still not finshed yet
The waves were going up and down like the wind rushing towards Ashintaya. Ashintaya sat by herself in the shade trying to hide from the world . She had the most beautiful smooth skin and pitch dark hair which covered her round eyes. People kept on showering her with countless gifts and presents which was a pain. Her feet were moving a lot and went into her castle to never see anyone again.
Woosh the wind rushed in as a familiar voice spoke. “Will you marry me my love? I love you so much I fell for you ever since I saw you,” the man suddenly proposed. Then Ashintaya suddenly relized and knew who it was. The weirdo called Brick who was very rich.
Ashintaya took off her white soft glove and slapped him with them. “I don’t love you peasant begone I rebuke you and banish you from this kingdom.” she answered. Brick knelt with his arms in the air as the tears in his eyes quickly and kept on coming down. He screamed as if he was about to die like the worst thing in his entire life just happened.
The next morning Ashintaya looked out her window to see Brick. Her teeth started to grit and she held a fist. Veins started showing everywhere on her body. Ashintaya tried to cool off but she couldn’t while seeing Bricks face it somehow irritated the princess.
Hello dear niece. Interesting short story. Not sure what to make of it because it seemed incomplete. For instance, Brick is a peasant who is rich and apparently weird from the perspective of a princess and would be criminal mastermind, Ashintaya whom once walked along the coast before fleeing into a castle in the hills seeking solitude. Brick then met his end at the hand of a hitman whom he thanked later.🤔
ReplyDeleteI suppose this could potentially be a good working progress for a fantasy, drama, thriller kind of story. If I may suggest you invite assistance from your peers and teachers for feedback on the synopsis of the story? Good attempt and keep up the good work dear.