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Thursday, 9 August 2018

My writing

Hi I am going to share you some of my writing from may it is a document called Hotspot doc. It is not finished and I made it in term two in may the first. I have not wrote about it in a long time. But  I did it because I thought it wound be fun to write about something amazing and it was and I will  start continue to work on it.

At my gob I have one task.Everyday I go in,sit at my desk,and wait for a red light to turn on.When it does, I push a button. I repeat this process until the end of my shift. One day, I find out what the button deos. . . that day it was all a dream. I felt very bad even if it was actually a nightmare so After I got dressed and sprinted to work. As I opened the door huffing and puffing everyone was working my boss told me to go to my desk I got to work I pressed the button and I got frightened I was terrified I found out my nightmare came to life I shouted AHHHHHHH!!!!!!! Very loud and  guess what the button does the button does is make meat I kind of understood because I work at tegal and we sell meat but the real Question to me is how they make the chicken.

But I would like it if you would give me feedback please.

2 comments:

  1. Love the story...

    check your grammar and all to make your story flow smoothly.

    good one.

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  2. Nice story dear niece. Always a good idea or habit to recheck your work before posting or handing it in, even if it is a first draft. Keep up the good work.

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